Based on Nature Reviews journal conventions and academic writing best practices.
Academic proposals must read as flowing, connected prose—not as bulleted lists or enumerated points.
The hallmark of excellent academic writing is the ability to present complex ideas through coherent paragraphs with smooth transitions. Point-by-point enumeration (bullet points, numbered lists) should be used sparingly and only where truly necessary.
When lists ARE appropriate:
When to avoid lists:
Transformation example:
Poor (point-by-point):
The main contributions include:
- A novel segmentation algorithm
- A multi-modal fusion framework
- Clinical validation results
Better (prose-based):
This research is expected to advance the field through several interconnected contributions. The development of a novel segmentation algorithm will enable automated plaque detection with accuracy surpassing current methods. Building on this foundation, a multi-modal fusion framework will integrate complementary imaging data to capture plaque characteristics inaccessible to any single modality. Finally, rigorous clinical validation will establish the prognostic value of these computational biomarkers for predicting cardiovascular events.
Academic writing requires appropriate epistemic humility. Hedging:
| Strength | Verbs | Example |
|---|---|---|
| Strong | will, must | Rarely appropriate |
| Medium | would, should, can | "This approach can improve..." |
| Weak | may, might, could | "Results might indicate..." |
Strong claim: "X proves Y"
Hedged: "X suggests/indicates/implies Y"
"X appears to demonstrate Y"
"X provides evidence for Y"
Recommended hedging verbs:
Strong: "X is important"
Hedged: "X is potentially/possibly/arguably important"
"X may be particularly significant"
Recommended adverbs:
"It is possible that..."
"Evidence suggests that..."
"This finding indicates that..."
"The data appear to show..."
"One interpretation is that..."
"It could be argued that..."
Introduction:
Too strong: "AI will transform healthcare."
Hedged: "AI has the potential to transform healthcare."
Too strong: "This gap must be addressed."
Hedged: "This gap warrants further investigation."
Methodology:
Too strong: "This method will produce accurate results."
Hedged: "This method is expected to yield reliable results."
Too strong: "We will prove the hypothesis."
Hedged: "We aim to test the hypothesis."
Results/Expected Outcomes:
Too strong: "The results will show..."
Hedged: "The results are anticipated to reveal..."
"We expect the findings to indicate..."
Too strong: "This proves that..."
Hedged: "This provides evidence that..."
"This suggests that..."
Significance:
Too strong: "This research will revolutionize..."
Hedged: "This research has the potential to advance..."
"This work may contribute to..."
Too strong: "The findings will definitely impact..."
Hedged: "The findings could have implications for..."
| 过强表达 | 适当表达 |
|---|---|
| 必将证明 | 有望表明、可能揭示 |
| 肯定会 | 预期将、有可能 |
| 彻底解决 | 有助于解决、为...提供新思路 |
| 完全正确 | 基本合理、大体上 |
| 已经证实 | 研究表明、证据显示 |
常用谦逊表达:
Every paragraph should begin with a clear topic sentence stating the main point.
Good:
"Recent advances in transformer architectures have significantly improved
natural language processing capabilities. [Evidence 1]. [Evidence 2].
[Synthesis]."
Avoid:
"[Evidence 1]. [Evidence 2]. Therefore, recent advances in transformer
architectures have significantly improved NLP capabilities."
English:
- "Over the past decade, [X] has emerged as a critical area of research in [field]."
- "Recent advances in [X] have opened new possibilities for [application]."
- "[Field] has witnessed remarkable progress in [area], driven by [factors]."
- "The importance of [X] has been increasingly recognized in [context]."
中文:
- "近年来,[X]已成为[领域]研究的热点问题。"
- "随着[X]的快速发展,[Y]日益受到学界关注。"
- "[领域]在[方面]取得了显著进展,主要体现在[具体表现]。"
English:
- "However, [X] remains poorly understood."
- "Despite these advances, significant challenges persist in [area]."
- "A critical gap exists in our understanding of [phenomenon]."
- "Current approaches fail to adequately address [issue]."
- "The relationship between [A] and [B] has not been systematically examined."
中文:
- "然而,[X]仍缺乏系统深入的研究。"
- "尽管如此,[领域]仍面临[问题]的挑战。"
- "目前研究对[问题]的关注相对不足。"
- "[A]与[B]之间的关系尚未得到充分探讨。"
English:
- "This research aims to address [X] by [approach]."
- "The primary objective of this study is to [verb] [what]."
- "This proposal seeks to investigate [question] through [method]."
- "Specifically, this study will [objective 1], [objective 2], and [objective 3]."
中文:
- "本研究旨在通过[方法]探讨[问题]。"
- "本文的主要目标是[动词][内容]。"
- "具体而言,本研究将:第一,...;第二,...;第三,..."
English:
- "Building on previous work, this study proposes to [approach]."
- "This approach was selected because [justification]."
- "[Method] offers several advantages for studying [phenomenon]."
- "[Method] is particularly suited to [research question] because [reasons]."
中文:
- "在前人研究基础上,本研究拟采用[方法]。"
- "选择该方法的原因在于:[理由]。"
- "[方法]对于研究[现象]具有以下优势:..."
English:
- "This work has the potential to advance [field/understanding]."
- "The findings may contribute to [theoretical/practical area]."
- "This research could provide insights into [phenomenon]."
- "The results are expected to have implications for [application]."
中文:
- "本研究有望推进[领域]的发展。"
- "研究结果可能为[理论/实践]提供新的视角。"
- "本研究预期将为[问题]的理解提供新的启示。"
Vary sentence length:
Vary sentence structure:
Start of paragraph:
"Moreover, recent studies have shown..."
"However, this approach has limitations..."
"In addition to these theoretical contributions..."
Mid-paragraph:
"This finding is particularly important because..."
"Consequently, researchers have begun to..."
Between paragraphs:
"Building on these observations, the next section..."
"Having established the theoretical framework, we now turn to..."
P - Point (topic sentence)
E - Evidence (supporting data/citations)
E - Explanation (analysis of evidence)
L - Link (connection to next idea or main argument)
[Point] Machine learning approaches have shown considerable promise for
medical image analysis. [Evidence] Recent studies have demonstrated that
convolutional neural networks can achieve diagnostic accuracy comparable
to expert radiologists in detecting certain conditions (Smith et al., 2023;
Jones, 2024). [Evidence] Furthermore, these systems have been successfully
deployed in clinical settings, with one large-scale trial reporting a 15%
reduction in diagnostic errors (Chen et al., 2024). [Explanation] These
advances suggest that AI-assisted diagnosis could address the growing
shortage of medical imaging specialists while maintaining high standards
of care. [Link] However, significant challenges remain in ensuring the
generalizability of these systems across diverse patient populations.
Repetition of key terms:
"The study examined neural network architectures. These architectures..."
Pronouns:
"Researchers proposed a new framework. They demonstrated that it..."
Synonyms and related terms:
"...machine learning algorithms. These computational approaches..."
Transitional phrases:
"Building on this foundation... In light of these findings..."
Integral citations (author as subject):
"Smith et al. (2023) demonstrated that..."
"According to Jones (2024), the relationship between..."
"As Chen and colleagues (2024) argue, ..."
Non-integral citations (parenthetical):
"Recent studies have shown significant improvements (Smith et al., 2023)."
"This relationship has been well-documented (Jones, 2024; Chen, 2024)."
| Strength | Verbs | Use When |
|---|---|---|
| Strong | demonstrate, establish, prove | Well-supported findings |
| Medium | show, indicate, suggest, reveal | Typical research findings |
| Weak | propose, speculate, claim, argue | Contested or preliminary |
| Neutral | report, describe, state, note | Describing without evaluation |
Agreement:
"Multiple studies have confirmed this relationship (Smith, 2022; Jones,
2023; Chen, 2024)."
"Researchers consistently report that... (Author1, Year; Author2, Year)."
Disagreement:
"While Smith (2022) argues that X, Jones (2023) presents evidence for Y."
"The evidence is mixed, with some studies supporting X (Author1, Year)
and others finding Y (Author2, Year)."
Building on prior work:
"Extending the work of Smith (2022), this study..."
"Building on Jones's (2023) framework, we propose..."
| Avoid | Use Instead |
|---|---|
| a lot of | numerous, considerable, substantial |
| big | significant, substantial, major |
| get | obtain, acquire, achieve |
| thing | factor, element, aspect, component |
| good | effective, beneficial, advantageous |
| bad | detrimental, adverse, problematic |
| very | highly, particularly, considerably |
| really | significantly, substantially |
| kind of / sort of | somewhat, to some extent |
| basically | fundamentally, essentially |
Quantity:
Vague: "many studies"
Precise: "numerous studies" / "several studies" / "a substantial body of research"
Degree:
Vague: "very important"
Precise: "crucial" / "essential" / "fundamental"
Time:
Vague: "recently"
Precise: "in the past five years" / "since 2020"
| Purpose | Strong Verbs |
|---|---|
| Showing | demonstrate, illustrate, reveal |
| Arguing | contend, assert, maintain |
| Analyzing | examine, investigate, assess |
| Comparing | contrast, differentiate, distinguish |
| Explaining | elucidate, clarify, account for |
| Increasing | enhance, augment, amplify |
| Decreasing | diminish, reduce, attenuate |
Avoid: "Scientists have been looking into this problem."
Better: "Researchers have investigated this problem."
Avoid: "This method is way better than the old one."
Better: "This method demonstrates significant improvements over previous approaches."
Avoid: "This proves that X causes Y."
Better: "This provides evidence that X may influence Y."
Avoid: "It is obvious that..."
Better: "Evidence suggests that..."
Avoid: "at the end of the day" / "in a nutshell"
Better: "ultimately" / "in summary"
Avoid: "a game-changer"
Better: "a significant advancement"
Avoid: "past history" / "future plans" / "basic fundamentals"
Better: "history" / "plans" / "fundamentals"
Avoid: "in order to"
Better: "to"
Avoid: "The data wants to show..."
Better: "The data indicate..."
Avoid: "This study tries to..."
Better: "This study aims to..."
Avoid: "I think this is important because..."
Better: "This is significant because..."
Acceptable: "We propose..." / "Our study..."
Figures significantly enhance research proposals by:
Include figure suggestions at appropriate locations using this format:
> **[Figure 1 Suggestion]** *Title: Overview of the proposed research framework*
>
> Content: A flowchart illustrating the three-phase research design, showing
> data flow from imaging modalities (CCTA, IVUS, OCT) through AI processing
> modules to clinical outcome predictions. Include distinct visual elements
> for each phase with connecting arrows indicating data flow.
>
> Recommended style: Clean vector graphics using a consistent color palette
> (e.g., blues for data inputs, greens for processing, oranges for outputs).
> Consider using icons for different imaging modalities.
| Section | Figure Type | Example |
|---|---|---|
| Introduction | Conceptual diagram | Research scope and positioning within the field |
| Literature Review | Timeline or taxonomy | Evolution of methods; Classification of approaches |
| Methodology | Flowchart/Architecture | Research framework; Network architecture; Data pipeline |
| Timeline | Gantt chart | Research phases with milestones and dependencies |
| Significance | Impact diagram | Connections between contributions and beneficiaries |
For Methodology Section:
[Figure 2 Suggestion] Title: Deep learning architecture for multimodal plaque analysis
Content: A schematic showing the neural network architecture with three parallel encoder branches (one for each imaging modality), a cross-modal attention fusion module in the center, and multiple output heads for segmentation, classification, and risk prediction tasks.
Style: Technical diagram with layer representations, dimension annotations, and data flow arrows. Use consistent shapes for similar operations.
For Timeline Section:
[Figure 3 Suggestion] Title: Research timeline and milestones
Content: Gantt chart showing four research phases across 48 months, with overlapping periods for parallel activities. Include diamond markers for key milestones (model completion, validation study, thesis submission).
Style: Horizontal bar chart with color-coded phases, clear date markers, and milestone annotations.